From a recent incident report. I'll just paste most of it here, because it's a gem:
"I was called outside to deal with a customer who was accosting female customers as they exited. I arrived and was told that we had escorted the customer out earlier for grabbing women. I started to talk to gentleman when he told me that he had done nothing, and he didn't understand why he was walked out. I informed him of the several female complaints, to which he responded, "I paid $20 dollars, I can touch the girls." I said no, and I had a girl inside willing to press charges, so he should leave the area and just go home. He then said, "No, you HAVE to arrest me, you HAVE to." At this point I gave him one more chance to leave, he said no, and gave me his hands to cuff him, so I did. [...] SFPD took him into custody with a Drunk and Disorderly charge."
So how about that.
Some photos from recent events:
That Daft Punk thing, wow. I just don't understand. It was a Daft Punk tribute band, and it sold out. You might be wondering, how does that even work? Daft Punk are basically DJs who wear funny motorcycle helmets. So a tribute band is... different guys in similar helmets pressing play on the same CD? Yeah, pretty much. They are really nice helmets, though. Probably very expensive! And they brought a lot of lights and built this absolutely gigantic pyramid-thing. So, you know, nice light show and set-dressing. It still kind of baffles me, though. Did I mention that it sold out? Because it sold out and I don't understand.
They'll probably be back here in a few months, so maybe I'll get a chance to scratch my head at it again.
Now I'm going to complain about blurbs.
One of the difficult things about updating our calendar is getting decently-written blurbs for the events. Sometimes it can be like pulling teeth to even get a complete lineup of the event, but it's even harder to get a couple of coherent sentences describing the event, that aren't just taking the lineup from the left column and re-stating the same information in sentence form.
You'd think that any band trying to actually have a career, as indicated by the fact that they're actually touring, would take the time to write a pithy explanation of what they're all about, using words that might means something to someone who isn't already familiar with them. You'd be wrong.
Here are some egregious recent examples I've been sent, mildly censored to protect the guilty. These are all terrible they don't communicate anything that would make someone attend the show if they weren't already planning to.
The "Come to this party, it will party more than any party has partied" blurb:
Join us onat DNA Lounge for , featuring all the new rising Bay Area talent! This month come check out up and coming dubstep sensation ! Also joining us will be and many other local artists that are ready to lay down some heavy bass lines and fat beats.
The "I will assert greatness without saying anything" blurb:
Three Bay Areabands, , and , come together under one roof at DNA Lounge for an incredible showcase on Thursday, . Expanding the beautiful realm between , these hand-picked bands push the boundaries of buzz bands right through to the bigger picture: great indie music, created by lovers of great indie music.
The "appeal to authority" blurb:
is the name of 's -year-old producer, . works out of his bedroom creating his unique brand of music. His music has been featured on and many more. His breakout album has gained worldwide praise and attention from superstars like and many more. Don't miss this rare showcase of raw talent!
This one's evocative, I guess, in that I can actually smell the dirty scalp and ball-sweat and skunk-weed just from reading it:
has been in the right place at the right time. The avid skater met esteemed workaholic producers and a 2007 in and later became immersed in weekly hot spot , witnessing the tear it up on the regular. An forced to take a year off from skating, which allowed him to focus on his music. He eventually ended up rooming with and , absorbing the rampaging, wonkily funky sounds he heard in his living space and then peace-ing them out into more blissful configurations.
The "exhaustive timeline and list of members" blurb:
was founded by and in 2004 as an outlet for experimenting with electronic music. With the addition of in 2005, released their first album on the label in 2006. After several weeks of topping and a handful of shows in the U.S. and Mexico, went on a long hiatus while starting putting together material that would advance and not copy other electronic music. In 2010 joined and the genre-bending album was written and conceived. Upon the release of in 2011 divided audiences and critics.
[and it goes on like this for three more paragraphs.]
So I wrote these guidelines that I send back to people who send me shitty blurbs. It doesn't really help. I scream into the void a lot. But if you're in a band, maybe reading this will help you write a bio that doesn't suck:
The target audience of these blurbs is a customer who is not familiar with the artist, and who is trying to decide whether they would enjoy this show.
So please do include things like:
- What genre of music do they play?
- How would one describe their music? Quotes from reviews in the press are great here. Failing that, influences or other performers that they sound like.
- Names of previous projects, if any.
- If there's something special about their stage show or instrumentation, mention that. (Customers want to have some sense of, "Am I going to see a full band, or some guy standing behind his laptop?")
Things that are OK to include, but that we feel are not like to cause someone to attend the show, are:
- Where are they from,
- What other bands have they played with recently;
- Did someone say something nice about their latest album.
If you have answered at least questions 1-3 in paragraph form, you will have written a decent blurb.
Things that you should not include in a blurb are:
- That they are performing at DNA Lounge;
- The date that they are performing at DNA Lounge;
- Also performing are "X, Y and Z" or "On tour with X, Y and Z".
- "Don't miss this great show", "be there or be square", "please please please attend", etc., etc.
We've already established that they're playing here, on what date, with whom, and it should go without saying that we'd like people to show up. Don't just repeat all of that in sentence-form.
Also please omit:
- They have been remixed by XYZ;
- They have "caught the attention of" XYZ;
- They were played on radio station XYZ, or have a video on MTV;
- Last year they toured with XYZ;
- They won an award (unless it's a Grammy or something).
Tell people why they will like them, not a list of other people who like them.